Essay Writing (Tourism)

IELTS-Writing1Mass tourism has a negative effect on a country and should be discouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Provide examples and supporting evidence to back up your opinion on this subject.

Nowadays, travelling has become more popular and easier in comparison to the past. Tourism industry has had a significant growth in recent decades. Although some argue mass tourism is disadvantageous to countries, I believe it provides every country with obvious economic and cultural benefits. To begin with, tourism is known as one of the most successful industries with a high rate of turn-over. In Turkey or Egypt, for instance, tourism is the main economic resource. If in these countries the government stops supporting this industry, they would face severe difficulties as they may lose their main source of income. As traveller spend lots of money in these countries, they can count on tourism as their main financial resources. Secondly, tourists introduce their culture as they get familiar with food, costume, history and culture of the destination country. According to a recent report published by the United Nations, racists is considerably low in countries which host high rate of travellers. As a matter of fact, travelling makes nations closer to each other since they get familiar with other nations in a real-life experience and not through the mass media. Indeed, it is the best way to broadens people’s horizons and remove their prejudgment about other countries. In conclusion, as far as I am concerned, travelling is undeniably beneficial both to tourists and destination countries. In addition, I think every country has some potentials to be a destination for tourists and it would be a great idea if governments could invest on this industry in order to improve their economy.

Estimated band score: 6.5 or 7.0

Word Count: 258

Examiner Comment: The candidate has presented relevant arguments in support of his/her opinion. The main ideas are elaborated well and explained coherently. Paragraphing of the essay is fine. However, there are some mistakes related to grammar and word choice. Overall, the essay can be improved further.