Essay Writing (Media)

IELTS-Writing1Television dominates the free-time for too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

It is true that watching television has occupied the leisure time of the majority of people. In the past 50 years, our life style has totally changed. Indeed, now, people tend to watch TV rather than doing some sports or social activities.

Sitting on a sofa for a long time watching movies and having junk foods has become a habit in many families. Statistics also illustrate that the main cause of health problems is watching TV. For instance, in the US which people spend more than four hours a day watching TV, the obesity rate is 50 percent more than Germany which people spend only one hour a day. Indeed, when people start watching TV they forget how the time flies. Thus, suddenly they find out they do not have any time to do some sports.

Television occupies not only our free-time , but also our mind. We choose our favourite music,movies and documentaries from TV. We also watch our preferred match in TV. As it can be seen this media enriches our emotional selves as well. In many families, parents and children do not even talk to each other as they have their own TV in a roombusy with watching it.

In conclusion, I believe we should manage our free-time in the way that we allocate only a portion of it for watching TV and the rest for socializing and doing some exercises. Moreover, when watching TV becomes a habit, it would be very difficult to change it and then it may cause serious physical and mental problems for us.

Estimated band score: 6.5

Word Count: 262

Examiner Comment: All the parts of the task are covered. The ideas have been presented coherently; it is evident that the writer progresses from one idea to another. Paragraphing is fine. However, there are several mistakes in grammar and word choice. Overall, the essay can be improved further.