Essay Writing (Government)

All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone to what extend do you agree or disagree?
The government should allocate an specific amount of budget to cover all education and healthcare for all the citizens. This debate has always been a controversial one in many countries. I strongly believe these primitive welfare services must be covered by the government as it is a win-win situation for both people and the government.

First of all, healthier society means better workforce and higher productivity for every country. Providing that government spends money on healthcare, the quality of medical services would become a priority for it. In this case, there would be more accurate supervision on medical centers, hospitals and pharmetical products. On one hand, people will be provided by better medical services and on the other hand, government will have healthier workforce who are working efficiently.

Second, education is vital for every society, by providing better educational system, rate of crime and unemployement will significantly decrease. Skilled people find job easier and faster in comparison to uneducated ones. In addition, educated people, normally, not only are better paied , but also they acquire many soft skills, such as commiunication and problem solving which are essential for their routine life. Moreover, regarding to “Australian Statistics Organisation” 2013 report, most of the crimes are committed by uneducated people. As it is completely clear, educating people solve many issues which every government is facing nowadays.

To sum up, from one side, if government fund education and healthcare system, people will experience better welfare regardless of the social class or how rich they are, on the other hand, it is a real good investment for the government.


Estimated band: 6.5

Word Count: 263

Examiner Comment: 

  1. The candidate’s effort to accomplish the task response is visible.
  2. The information is presented coherently.
  3. It is evident that the writer progresses from one idea to another.
  4. There are some errors in word choice, spelling and grammar.
  5. Overall, the essay can be improved further.